Tell, Don’t Show??

Searching through again, I found this ebook titled, Tell, Don’t Show! * by James Lofquist.

Blink, blink.

I stared in disbelief. I have been researching on what I need to possibly have a chance at having someone take a look past the first page.

One of them is “Show, Don’t Tell” technique.

For those that need help, showing is usually better writing than telling.

For example: Instead of writing, “His arm was burning.” You could write, “Jim put a cold compress on his arm.”

So, there I stared at this product in a simmering rage/shock thinking, “Is this guy serious?”

Anyways, I picked it up. For 99 cents, I figured why not?

My eyes opened up.

It is a very short book so I won’t go into great detail. From what you can see from the Amazon site on the contents is that James gives you:

  • How to Tell
  • What it looks like
  • Questions and answers
  • Exercises

The idea here is that showing first in your stories is a great way to bottleneck your productivity and writing.

Being more productive is good.

Not getting much writing done or none at all is bad.

You can and should get the showing done in the rewrite(s) of your draft. Telling stuff first gets it down faster. The flowery prose can come later.

In the end though, this is just another tool that you can use. If it does not work for you, then don’t use it.

I hope it is useful.

*this is an Amazon affiliate link.

20,000 Per Cell: Why Midi-chlorians Suck


One word ruined Star Wars for me, and probably for a generation of fans, too. That word wasn’t Jar Jar or Watto. It wasn’t a character.

It was “midi-chlorians.”

With that one word, the mechanisms of the Force became less spiritual and more scientific. Major bummer. The draw of the concept of the Force in the Original Trilogy is that it comes across as a low-maintenance religion. It’s kinda like Unitarianism that also gives you psychic powers and enables you to jump, fight and stare better than other members of your respective species. (Seriously, Jedi wield eye contact like a weapon. Never get into a staring contest with them.) You couldn’t measure the Force really, unless it whopped you upside the head. It was just there, lingering like a threat or a promise.

Until, of course, “midi-chlorians.”

Moreover, “midi-chlorians” messes up every extrapolated wish fulfillment that accompanies Star Wars

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